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역시 깔끔한 재윤이의 일기..
김치를 잘먹게 되었다니 부럽네요.
울 아이들은 한번 먹이려면 오만상을 다 찌푸리는데..ㅠ.ㅠ

역시 살펴보도록 할게요.

<I like Kimchi>
<I Like Kimchi>
제목이기 때문에 각 단어를 대문자로 시작하게 했습니다.

Friday December 29th
Friday, December 29th
쉼표를 살짝 넣어 구분을 지었습니다.

Kimchi is good for our health.
At first I was afraid that it would be very spicy.
But it was just a bit spicy.
It was yummier than I thought.

I'm going to eat more kimchi from now on.
고칠 곳이 없는 문장들..^^

I want foreigner to come over to Korea to eat kimchi.
I want more foreigners to come over to Korea to eat kimchi.
문맥상 외국인을 복수로 고쳐보았습니다...

잘 쓰셨어요. Good job!

: 재윤맘님의 글입니다.
이것도 The kids time 에서 김치에 대한 기사를 읽고 써본 일기예요.날짜도 겨우 나중에 쓰고.. 글씨도 그렇고.. 좀 엉망이네요. <I like Kimchi> Friday December 29thKimchi is good for our health.At first I was afraid that it would be very spicy.But it was just a bit spicy. It was yummier than I thought.I'm going to eat more kimchi from now on.I want foreigner to come over to Korea to eat kimchi.

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