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아래의 컨텐츠는 초등학생이 직접 작성한 영어작문을 원어민 선생님이 실제로 첨삭지도 한 내용입니다.
또래 아이들의 영어작문 결과를 통해 내 아이 작문기초!! 살~작 엳보는 기회로 활용하세요.
같은주제로 직접 써보게 하시는 것도 Writing 실력을 Up시키는 좋은 방법입니다.
[작문 주제입니다]
If you could design a new flag for South Korea what would it look like? Why would you choose these symbols to represent South Korea?
[학생이 작성한 Essay 원문이며 빨간표시는 원어민 선생님이 첨삭(수정)한 부분입니다]
First, 1. the symbol of South Korea put in the middle of the Taegeuk 2. patterns. because, 3. Taeguk pattern is well Represent for korean's idea. Then, 4. the remaining portion of the flag to use Hangul consonants. 5. Opinions about the meaning of the sum of the flag is a symbol of South Korea. Hangul is a 6. of the South korea is a great symbol. 7. It's makes King Sejong and it is very scientific. 8. Taegeuk patterns are also symbols of South Korea. The Taeguk pattern of red means 9. Positive energy, and blue means 10. Negative energy. 11. Except 12. for 13. this, there are many 14. symbol of South 15. korea. However, most think it's important to be made. 16. Here is my idea. 17. thank you.
[원어민 선생님의 유혈별 첨삭내용이며 어떻게 써야 더 알맞은 표현인지 알 수 있는 대목입니다]
| Grammar_Articles(the, a or an)/관사 5. Opinions : The opinions 8. Taegeuk : The Taegeuk | ||
| Grammar_Prepositions(on, at, from, by, to.....)/전치사 12. for : from | ||
| Grammar_Conjunction(and, but)/접속사 | ||
| Grammar_Capitalization/대소문자 9. Positive : positive 10. Negative : negative 15. korea : Korea 17. thank : Thank | ||
| Grammar_Conjugation/동사변화활용 | ||
| Grammar_Punctuation/부호사용 2. patterns. because, : patterns, because | ||
| Essay Format_Sentence Structure/문장의 구성 1. the symbol of South Korea put in the : I would put the symbol of South Korea in the 3. Taeguk pattern is well Represent for korean's idea : the Taeguk patterns best represent Korea's ideology (?) 4. the remaining portion of the flag to use Hangul consonants : I would use Hangul consonants in the remaining portion of the flag 6. of the South korea is a great symbol : great symbol of South Korea 7. It's makes : It was made by | ||
| Essay Format_inappropriate Words/단어사용 적절성 11. Except : Aside 13. this : these 14. symbol : symbols 16. Here : This |
[학생이 작성한 작문에 대해 원어민 선생님이 아래와 같이 코멘트를 남겨 주셨네요]
I appreciate your effort to share your ideas. You understood the question well, and I think you were able to give a good answer for it. However, I was confused with most of your sentences because of your construction. I can say that you sometimes find it hard to organize your words properly in your sentences, thus your thoughts are a bit confusing. Pay attention to the corrections and try your best next time to construct your sentences more effectively. You have good grammar skills, but focus on your word order. Just keep on reading books and I'm sure you will improve a lot.
Good luck in your studies! Have a great day!
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