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   Many people have a pet such as a dog, a cat and a bird. But if I could have a pet, I would have a small quiet parrot and I have three reasons to have a parrot
   The first reason is that parrot follow your word and they can talk English if I teach them. In my house my father and mother can talk English but they would not talk very many time, so I don't have an English friend. But if a parrot come to my room, I could have an English friend and I could talk and talk.
   The second reason is because a parrot is very very colorful and I like thing that is colorful, like a rainbow and a parrot is just like a rainbow and I could enjoy the parrot for very long time and think it is a rainbow
   The last reason is a parrot is quiet when is sleepy and a dog or a cat is very noisy but a parrot will be quiet and I want peace and a good quiet room. Some parrot is very noisy but I will buy a quiet parrot for peace.
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