아이가 쓴 글인데 첨삭지도 좀 부탁드려요

토끼엄마
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2011-10-26

1학년 여자아이에요.어릴때부터..뭐 쑥쑥둥이죠..학교들어가니 영어할 시간이 정말 없네요.따로 수업을 하지않다보니..얼마전 영어동화책 만들며 놀았어요.그림그리는것도 좋아하고....

이틀동안 세권 만들었어요.제가보기에도 어설프고 틀린부분이 많이 있네요..

그래서 첨삭지도~좀 부탁드리고 싶어요.

쿠키앤절이나 요술돌맹이는 나름아이디어 차용한것같구요..불교신자지만 아이학교가 기독교다 보니 요즘 하느님에대한 글을 많이 적고있어요.

제목 cookie world

charater ..Alma, cookie angel. The king(Plenzen,name)mom, Chelmas

Once upon a time there was a girl named Alma.
She had a sisiter named Chelmas(Chel) ,mom went shopping so Alma and Chel waited .
But Alma went to the big car ROAR!!
So Alma met a king he had a cookie hat.
And she met a cookie angel.
She played with her..but lighting came and thunder!
The king and the angel float up to the sky. WAIT!!! WAIT!!!
But they kept floating. Alma waked up.
But it was a dream! Alma went to her good house.

제목 Jesus made it all

I go to church everyday.
I learn Jesus and pray.
I love JESUS, He loves me too.
Today I learned how did plant appear.
I raised my hand "did Jesus make them too?"
The teacher said "yes"
Now I am in my house.
I'm planting seeds around the garden.
I gave sunshine,love and water.
They grow and grow.
NOW it is a sprout!!
Jesus came to me and said " Thank you for planting my seeds" and he went away

제목 magic pebble

I went to the woods.
I saw a pebble. I saw a news on TV.
It was a pebble!
Same like mine!! Now I khow it is a Magic pebble.
I picked my pebble. I pick it way high in the air.
I said " Pebble, Pebble, take my wish! I want a doll!"
It didn`t work. I mumbeled "I want a doll Magic pebble"
And it worked!! I tell you! It worked!

I have a doll. I love my magic pebble!

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