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형민이가 스키에 재미를 느꼈나봅니다. 높은 곳을 올라가서 지치는 것도
무서워하지 않게 되다니..부러운데요.^^

이번 일기는 사소한 실수 말고는 고칠 곳이 거의 없었어요.
놀라운 형민이...!

Date : January 24th

Weather : It was cold and Windy.
Weather : It was cold and windy.
windy 가 대문자로 시작할 이유는 없지요?

Tittle : last ski
Tittle : Last Ski
제목이므로 대문자로 시작하기!

I woke up early at 7 O'clock in the morning.
I went to the ski slope.
With my teacher, we wore skis, and went up by the Lift.
고칠 곳이 없음.

We went about 10 k.m. long !
We went up about 10 kilometers!
리프트를 타고 간거니까 up 이 있어야 겠지요?

I was a little scared.

Then we slide down.
Then we slid down.
slide 의 과거형으로 고쳤습니다.

It was cool!
We went down really fast !
Snow was flying everywhere !
After we skied down several times, we took a rest.
Then we went more faster ~
That's the time when I fell down !
This was the last time of ski lessons.
I want to go skiing again.

손 댈곳 없는 문장들...정말 잘썼어요~!^^

: 형민맘님의 글입니다.
Date : January 24thWeather : It was cold and Windy.Tittle : last ski I woke up early at 7 O'clock in the morning.I went to the ski slope.With my teacher, we wore skis, and went up by the Lift.We went about 10 k.m. long !(리프트를 타고 10키로미터 올라갔다는 뜻인듯합니다.)I was a little scared.Then we slide down.It was cool!We went down really fast !Snow was flying everywhere !After we skied down several times, we took a rest.Then we went more faster ~That's the time when I fell down !This was the last time of ski lessons.I want to go skiing again.============================================================ 이번 방학 야심찬 도전 스키 레슨이 드디어 끝났습니다.새벽부터 어찌나 서둘르고 그날은 피곤했던지..그간 형민이 일기에 너무 절절히 써내려갔었죠? 마지막 시간에 중상급자 스로프에서 멋지게 내려오는데..아..정말 멋졌답니다.처음엔 스키 신고 어찌나 버벅였던지..앞이 까마득해보이더니제법 경사진 스로프를 활강(설마 활강했겠어요?ㅋㅋ)하는 모습이 참으로 든든..남은 시즌동안엔 가족과 함께 다녀와야겠습니다.

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